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The graph below depicts the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie charts below shows how electricity is used in an average home in the same country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make cmparison where relevant.

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The supplied line graph indicates how much
electricity
 is required for English individuals in their daily
life
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lives
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 in the
winter
 and summer.
Moreover
, the provided pie chart illustrates what
the
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electricity
 is consumed
for
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by
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 houses in the UK. A glance at the graph reveals that the typical daily
demand
 for
electricity
 has fluctuation trends in the
winter
 and summer.
In addition
, heating rooms and water
has
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have
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 the highest percentage of
electricity
 used in
England
 over the period. In the
winter
, approximately 35000 units of
electricity
was
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were
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 required for people in
England
.
Following
this
, the amount of
electricity
demand
 usually fluctuated and reached just under 50000 at 21 in the
winter
 of the UK. (which was the highest proportion of
demand
of
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for
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electricity
 over the period).
Furthermore
, just over
a
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half of the
electricity
 was used for heating rooms and water
at
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52.5% in
England
.
In contrast
, the percentage of using
electricity
 for
vaccum
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vacuum
 cleaners, food mixers and electric tools in an average house was the same as lighting, TV and radio at 15% in the UK. Surprisingly, the amount of daily
demand
of
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electricity
 for people was nearly 18000 at 0, and after a slight
decrease
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 it hit the bottom at roughly 14000 at 6 in the summer in
England
. (which was the lowest amount of daily
demand
 over the whole year).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, winter, demand, england with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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