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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant."

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant."
The charts and table illustrate data about the budget of the police for the
years
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 2017 and 2018 in an individual area in
Britian
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Britain
, and where they got the money from and how it was distributed.
This
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 unit is measured in
both
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 millions and percentages.
Overall
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, the majority of the budget came from
national
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the national
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 government,
whereas
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 they allocated most of the money
on
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to
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 salaries
on
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in
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both
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years
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.
According to
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 the table,
both
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years
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 have immense differences in
the
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income. Starting with the national government,
both
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years
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 were quite similar to each other, in the
year
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 2017 they got 176.5
million
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 and 177.8
million
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 in 2018.
On the other hand
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, the local taxes had a significant development from 91.2
million
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 to 102.3
million
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, the following
year
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.
Lastly
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, the other sources (e.g. grants) slightly went from 38
million
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 to 38.5
million
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. The total was 304.6
million
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 during the first
year
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then
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 jumped to 318.6
million
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 in 2018. When examining how they spent the money, they
primarly
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primarily
 spent 75% on salaries (office and staff) in
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year
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the year
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 2017,
then
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 the percentage reduced to 69%.
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, they spent the exact same amount on buildings and transport with
the
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a
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 percentage of 17%.
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, in the
year
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of
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2017, they distributed only 8% on technology, but the percentage grew moderately to 14% in the other
year
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, both, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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