WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

The line chart above provides information about percentages of people who didn't have occupation in two countries from
March
1993 to
March
1999.
Overall
, as the data shows
although
initially
U.S
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U.S.
unemployment rate was much higher than Japan,
at the end
of the period in
the
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question Japan surpassed
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the U.S
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U.S
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U.S.
regarding the percentage of
workforce
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the workforce
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.
While
Both countries had
steady
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a steady
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flow between
March
1996 to
March
1998, the chart shows dramatic changes
betweent
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between
1998 and 1999. at the beginning of the period, The
U.S
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U.S.
unemployment rate was about 7%
however
, it experienced a downward trend and
decrease
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to nearly over 4% in the year 1999.
One
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the other hand,
Japan
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Japan's
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percentage started at about 2.5% which
followed
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was followed
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by
gradual
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a gradual
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increase
by
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in
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March
1998 and
finally
between
March
1998 and
March
1999 it witnessed
the
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a
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significant rise and reached
to
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about 5%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words march with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rate
  • trend
  • fluctuations
  • steady
  • comparing and contrasting
  • significant
  • data
  • economy
  • period
  • comparison
  • decrease
  • increase
  • peak
  • trough
  • stabilize
  • recover
  • dip
  • surge
  • notable
  • bar graph
  • line graph
  • percentage
  • time frame
  • correlation
  • economic indicators
  • variable
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