These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

the modern technologies have been easy living for us that have showed in jobs. today many
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from
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and others do not
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consequences
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would argue that these are outweighed by the
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advantages of working at
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but many
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people
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disadvantages
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for instance
between 1995-1998 FG factory
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cars in
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that decided 15% of all
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from
home
.
thus
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decreased
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complained
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finally
the
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area for
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therefore
this
part of
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that have many strang
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experiences
about
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at
home
.
on the other hand
many
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people
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at university
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believe
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can help
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people
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society
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government
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the university 30% of all
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to
work
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for 6
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months
and
as a result
they saw
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%
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performance
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this
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showed customers
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satisfied
more than
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traditional management
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of
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are tending that the
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work
from
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it has many
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advantages
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company
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the company
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and
employees
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save money and time for both and they
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more time with family.
to sum up
,
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at
home
already is
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best
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to save money and time and
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believe
the upsides can justify these drawbacks.
therefore
it is clear that
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at
home
can help everyone and it is
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making progress in
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. after
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analysis
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subject, it is predicted that the positive effect of working at
home
will always be greater than the negative effect.
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