Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Manufacturing greens,like fruits or vegetables for own
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is important to the government,
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of importing from overseas. In my
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,it has more advantages than drawbacks. Because,difficult
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producing
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all types of
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food
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the local
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, it will be cheaper and more reliable. Despite
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getting meals from abroad,every country should originate
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themselves. It has several reasons,at the outset,if
people
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eat
lcoal
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local

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products,it will be cheaper. Because, getting greens or
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from
near
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farms, shop directors
s
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should not pay more for a delivery.
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,if that
meat
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or fruit comes from
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another country
other countries

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,they should deliver by plane,train or ship and
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it will be much more expensive.
Furthermore
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, manufacturing candies,fruits or even
meat
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give
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trust to the
people
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. The reason is that if
person
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sees
producing
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one type of
food
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,like
a
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candy or apples, he feels
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to the product and he can buy it without any questions or worries.
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,if he
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buy foreign
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or
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,he cannot realise
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of
producting
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producing
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and
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result
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he feels
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.
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, if the government
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give cheaper and more reliable
food
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to its
people
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,
it
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farms should originate to the local shops.
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, any country can
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all types of meals.Because,wheater conditions,geographical location,budget or other things can create problems to produce.
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grow
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.
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wheat needs hot weather,but
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located in the north cannot afford it.
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cannot grow
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a their location. Because,all products cannot originate in one location,like a mountains or seas.
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do
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not able to grow vegetables,because of their soil. In conclusion,
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,
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should produce
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,vegetables,fruits and others
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,who live there.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • food security
  • domestic production
  • import dependency
  • political instability
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • nutritional deficiencies
  • comparative advantage
  • agricultural methods
  • local economies
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