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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
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The two rendered maps, which depict in great detail, illustrate the comparison between the middle of
Islip
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town
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 at the present time and refurbishment in the future.
Overall
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, it is clearly observable that few facilities are in
Islip
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town
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centre
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 now,
while
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 planned development for
Islip
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town
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centre
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 shows that more facilities are being added in the future. To commence with, now in the north of
Islip
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town
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centre
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 has countryside, shops, main road and housing that main road is between two shops. In the southeast of
Islip
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town
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centre
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 is one park in the south of
Islip
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town
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centre
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 is housing
as well as
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 in the southwest of
Islip
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town
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centre
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 is a school. On the flip side, after the planned renovation is shown that one dual carriageway in the
Islip
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town
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centre
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 that in dual carriageway has added facilities
such
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 as a bus station, shopping
centre
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, carpark, and two new housing
in addition
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 to pedestrians only.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words islip, town, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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