The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period.
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The illustrated charts provide the average data about the amount of money British parents have spent on
sport
activities of their children and the proportions of popularity of certain Change the noun form
sports
sport
types namely football, athletics
and swimming in a period of six years, from 2008 to 2014.
Looking at an
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the
overall
structure, it is readily apparent that, the spendings
of British families Fix the agreement mistake
spending
to
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on
sport
activities was higher each year, over the six-year period. Football came first Change the noun form
sports
it
terms of popularity Correct your spelling
in
amoung
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among
population
within the given timeframe, Correct article usage
the population
however
swimming and athletics
were less favored
.
In 2008, Change the spelling
favoured
the
average Correct article usage
an
20
pounds per month, from family budgets, were spent on children's Change preposition
of 20
sport
hobbies,Change the noun form
sports
however
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however,
this
amount underwent a gradually
rise to Change the word
gradual
aproximately30
pounds per month in the ultimate
period.
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approximately
While
football sport club
had approximately 8 Fix the agreement mistake
sports clubs
million
British children as participants in 2008, the proportions of swimming and athletics
accounted for about 2 million
and less than a million
respectively. The figures for footbal
remained stable for the following 6 years; Correct your spelling
football
however
, the number of members for swimming nearly doubled to 4.5 million
and for athletics
multiplied 5 times, to 5 million
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sport, athletics, million with synonyms.
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