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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.
The two provided maps illustrate the
school
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 buildings and
its
Correct pronoun usage
their
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 surroundings back in 2004 and how
it
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they
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 will look after the reconstruction in 2024. Looking at an
overall
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 structure, it is readily apparent that, the most significant feature after reconstruction will be a new
school
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 building.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, some facilities will be replaced, and new roads are
also
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 planned. The
school
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 capacity was 500 students in 2004;
however
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, with the addition of a third
school
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 building,
this
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 figure will be doubled to 1000 students. The direction and size of
path
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the path
a path
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 between the
school
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 buildings will be modified,
in
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addition
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addition,
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 a new corridor between previous schools will be built.
New
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The new
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school
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 building is lying in the sports field's terrain, so the sports field will be
reconstucted
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reconstructed
constructed
 to the right side of the main road;
also
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 the second car park
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also
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is also
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 planned,
due to
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increasing
Correct article usage
the increasing
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 number of students and their parents.
According to
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 the map, the location of the first car park and the main entrance will remain unchanged.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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