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The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie graph illustrates the quantity of money that children's
charity
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 located in the USA spent and received in 2016. One striking feature is that donated leads the way in the
charity
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

's revenue . Program services tops the list for
charity
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 expenditure. The total revenue generated by the
charity
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 in 2016 was 53.561.380 dolar . The largest proportion was from donated food , which amounted to 86.6% of the total income .Community contributions made up 10.4 %
while
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 program revenue was relatively small at 2.2%. Other smaller indication included investment income (0.2%) ,government grants(0.2%) and other income (0.4 %). The
charity
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

's total expenditure accounted for 53.222.896$ . A substantial indication was spent on program services equal to 95.8 % of the total expenses. Fundraising accounted for 2.6% and management and general expenses 1.6%

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words charity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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