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he diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

he diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.
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The picture illustrates manufacturing breaks for the building industry.
This
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 process starts by extracting clay and finishes by delivering bricks. First of all, the clay is
digged
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dug
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 by
machine
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a machine
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 and filtred by
metal
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a metal
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 grid. After that,
the
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apply
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sand and water are added to the substance and there are two ways to make breaks: with
wire
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a wire
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 cutter and with mould. Products are dried in
oven
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the oven
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 and replaced in
kiln
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the kiln
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. In
kiln
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the kiln
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, they are moderated with 200-980 degrees
Celsium
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Celsius
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temperature
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the temperature
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 is upped to 870-1300 degrees. Following that, bricks
cooled
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were cooled
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 in
cooling
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a cooling
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chambler
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chamber
, packaged and delivered to the industry.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • manufacture
  • bricks
  • building industry
  • process
  • dig
  • prepare
  • clay
  • mold
  • shape
  • dry
  • fire
  • kiln
  • cool
  • package
  • fired
  • overview
  • importance
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