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You are planning for a vacation and want your friend to go with you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: tell him/her why you want to take a vacation describe your plan invite him/her to go with you.

#vacation #friend #plan
Dear James, I hope things are well, I
was
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fineshed
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finished
 my project and given my salary perfectly, so I
want
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want to
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 go on
trip
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a trip
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 for
ones
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 week and I am alone,
moreover
 sending
letter
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a letter
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for
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 you. Anyway, my plan is great ideas
sush
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such
 as travel to
france
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France
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especially
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, especially
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paris
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Paris
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 and
go
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 to
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a nightclub
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nightclub
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nightclubs
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, going to shore and swimming. I will try payment for all
cost
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costs
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this
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of this
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 trip like
deposit
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the deposit
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 hotel,
cost
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the cost
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dishes
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of dishes
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 and
others
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 shopping. I
want
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want to
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 invite him
for
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on
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the
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apply
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vacation, James what are doing
!
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James
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James,
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 please accept my request why in the past very good with you. best wishes, Mohsen
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Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance the logical flow of ideas by clearly structuring the content into distinct paragraphs for each topic. For example, have separate sections for your vacation reason, itinerary, and invitation.
Coherence and Cohesion
Review sentence structure and grammar to improve clarity. Ensure that each sentence conveys a complete idea. Proofreading can help identify areas that may be unclear due to grammatical oversights.
Task Achievement
Ensure a consistent tone that is friendly and inviting throughout the letter. Adjust the language for a more conversational and inviting style, especially in the invitation section.
Task Achievement
The letter effectively includes all three points: reason for vacation, plan description, and an invitation.
Coherence and Cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate for a friendly letter, establishing a personal connection.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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