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he table below shows changes in the numbers of residents cycling to work in different areas of the UK between 2001 and 2011.

he table below shows changes in the numbers of residents cycling to work in different areas of the UK between 2001 and 2011.
This
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 table shows data about how big the change
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 residents cycling to work has been in different locations. The table compares the percentage of change of people cycling to work in different places all around the United Kingdom. Some cities have noticed a very big change.
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, others have suffered a smaller one. In Inner London the number has increased significantly, being
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43,493 in 2001 and 106,219 in 2011 what it is
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 a 144% difference.
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, in Brighton and Hove, despite
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 less population, the percentage of variation continues to be very elevated with
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 total of 109%. These two examples show how big the
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 can be in only 10 years. Analysing other cities, we can see that
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 in Liverpool the development has not been as big as for the areas mentioned previously. In fact, the difference is only of around 1300 people, so 48%.
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, in Leeds, the variation is of 2000 people more or less,
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, the variation between 2001 and 2011 is
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49%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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