Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages. (IELTS 9, AC)

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education

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plays a vital role in
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life.
Learnings
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Learning

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new things on
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basis aids a person
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knowledge

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about the things which are
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going
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,
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some thoughts of people
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believe

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that discovering new language since they start
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would be more meaningful and
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beneficial

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for young ones to cop-up with
todays
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today's

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trend.
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, other
group
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groups

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of people think
gradually
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gradual

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introduction to different languages should be done. In
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essay, I will express both advantages and disadvantages and give my opinion
at the end
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. To commence with, Learning is
an
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cricual
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crucial

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part of everyone's life and there are some people who are still studying even though they have reached
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a certain

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age
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level.
Been
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Being

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familair
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familiar

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with
the
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apply

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foregin
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foreign

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language since childhood has always been
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taking
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as a
positve
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positive

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outcomes
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outcome

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. If
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starts teaching them one extra subject
since
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day one
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children . Owing to
this
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, they can become an expert in that particular subject.
Seconldy
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Secondly

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,
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a toddler
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toddler
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toddlers

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at
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that
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group can grasp more
knowedlge
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knowledge

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which can be a plus point for us to
taught
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teach

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them. As
,
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there
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their

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grapsing
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grasping

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power is more during that
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group.
Thirdly
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,they could grow their interest in other
lanaguage
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languages
language

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and can
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participate

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in any competition which will result into
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achievement

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and develops more confident in them. On the
contarty
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contrary

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, Humans
also
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belive
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believe

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that pushing your child at
very
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a very

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young
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to learn more
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then
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one thing could not only make them
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but
also
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they
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feel that we are focusing our
decision
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decisions

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on them.
Additionaly
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Additionally

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, If they start
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learning

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new native spoken in secondary
then
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they have to
faces
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challegenes
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challenges

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as they
other subject
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another subject
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to work on.
This
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could result
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as
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burden
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on them and not
focsuing
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focusing

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on different activities. Agglomerating the above summary, I
belive
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believe

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that
been
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being

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taught
an
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apply

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english
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English

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spoken at primary
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would be more impactful for students and they can even develop
an
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a

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carrier
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career

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into
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in

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feild
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field

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Thats
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That's

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why it should be
there
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their

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complusory
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compulsory

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to be taught in primary
school
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elaboration and evidence
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introduction improvement
Consider refining your introduction to make it clearer and more engaging.
task response
The essay addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of the topic as required by the task.
conclusion strength
The conclusion effectively summarizes your viewpoint and aligns with the content presented.
content understanding
You show an understanding of the importance of introducing a foreign language at a young age.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive flexibility
  • Linguistic structures
  • Accent and pronunciation
  • Cultural awareness
  • Cognitive development
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Critical thinking
  • Social inclusion
  • Fluency
  • Resource allocation
  • Curriculum
  • Native language
  • Secondary education
  • Pedagogical
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