Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages. (IELTS 9, AC)

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In today's Era,

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education

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life.

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new things on

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basis aids a person

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knowledge

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some thoughts of people

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that discovering new language since they start

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would be more meaningful and

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beneficial

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trend.

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of people think

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introduction to different languages should be done. In

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essay, I will express both advantages and disadvantages and give my opinion

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part of everyone's life and there are some people who are still studying even though they have reached

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familair

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foregin

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foreign

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children . Owing to

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that

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group can grasp more

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knowledge

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them. As

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there

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grapsing

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grasping

power is more during that

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group.

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,they could grow their interest in other

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languages

language

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participate

in any competition which will result into

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achievement

and develops more confident in them. On the

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contrary

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that pushing your child at

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young

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feel that we are focusing our

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on them.

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new native spoken in secondary

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they have to

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challegenes

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challenges

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burden

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on them and not

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focusing

on different activities. Agglomerating the above summary, I

belive

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that

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taught

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english

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spoken at primary

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would be more impactful for students and they can even develop

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why it should be

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complusory

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compulsory

to be taught in primary

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Work on the accuracy of vocabulary and grammar to enhance overall clarity.

elaboration and evidence

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introduction improvement

Consider refining your introduction to make it clearer and more engaging.

task response

The essay addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of the topic as required by the task.

conclusion strength

The conclusion effectively summarizes your viewpoint and aligns with the content presented.

content understanding

You show an understanding of the importance of introducing a foreign language at a young age.

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Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

333 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Cognitive flexibility
Linguistic structures
Accent and pronunciation
Cultural awareness
Cognitive development
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Critical thinking
Social inclusion
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Resource allocation
Curriculum
Native language
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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages. (IELTS 9, AC)

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think that the provision of healthcare is the responsibility of the state, while others believe the individual to be responsible for the costs of their own healthcare. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these perspectives?

Some people believe that in the future, environmental problems will mean that we are unable to live on this planet. In order to survive, the human species will need to find another planet that can support life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Fulltime students should spend a lot of time on studies, but they should be involved in other activities too. To what extend do you agreed or disagreed

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?