What mistakes are in this text? The question it answers is Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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topic to discuss about education and work. Some

people

think that

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from

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university

is one of the best

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they can do to get a proper

job

.

Then

on the other side,

people

think that

experienced

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in some fields or

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is

the

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prominent. Now I will write my point of

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for both.

Firstly

, as one of

people

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the people

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who hold a

bachelor

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degree in education. I strongly agree that completing

university

education is the best way to get a proper

job

. My lecturer

was

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said that “education is a social elevator for a middle or lower class to move to another class”. I think the statement is very interesting. There

are

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so many

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of

job

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that

is

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need

a specific

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specific skills

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skills

to

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it

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. By completing

university

,

people

has

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many

through

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process

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to gain some specific

skills

based on the major they had taken. But,

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the other sides. I

also

agree

if

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people

think that getting

experience

and developing soft

skills

is

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important. I think some jobs like sales, customer services and

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another related job

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job

that have to interact and communicate with

human

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would be

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by gaining

experience

and

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in

times

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. The more we practice, the more we

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the

job

. So I conclude that completing

university

and

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getting

experience

and developing soft

skills

are equal things to get the best

job

. Both views are fulfilling each other. If we are looking for a specific

job

then

we have to

completing

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university

,

then

if we

are have

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a plan to work with

human

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, getting

experience

and developing soft

skill

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skills

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is the best way.

Last

but not least, if we

are combine

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it, we can have more opportunities to get

job

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a job

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in many ways.