the chart below show how in the usa ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

the chart below show how in the usa ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
Given is a bar graph illustrating
frequency
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the frequency
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of consuming fast
food
at restaurants by individuals in the USA over a period of 10 years.
overall
,
it is clear that
consumption
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the consumption
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of fast
food
once a week in 2006 is
as
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the same
frequent
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as eating once or twice a month in 2013. A glance at the bar chart reveals that people rarely used to eat junk
food
evey
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every
day and there were few people who never ate it as well, by just below 5
percent
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during the period demonstrated. It is shown from the chart that most individuals went to
the
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restaurant once a week in 2003, 2006,and 2013, by approximately 30%, 33%, and 27%, respectively
while
the majority of junk foods were consumed once
of
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or
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twice a month, by around 33% in 2013. It should
also
be mentioned that 15
percent
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of people ate unhealthy
food
a few times a year in 2006 and 2013, simultaneously.
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