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The graph below shows the satisfaction raiting of the staff in four colledges from 1991 to 2002

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The graph illustrates staff satisfaction levels across four colleges, A, B,
C
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, and D. The graph covers a
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 of eleven years (from 1991 to 2002).
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 A
initially
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 enjoyed the highest satisfaction rating, exceeding 60% and two times higher than the lowest-rated
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C
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, which experienced a downward trend during the
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. It peaked in 1995 at 79%,
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 varied around 60% until 2000, but
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 fell to 40% by 2002.
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 D maintained a quite stable satisfaction rating. It fluctuated around 40% for most of the
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 before declining to 20% by 2002.
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 B maintained a significant upward trend. After early fluctuations, it steadily increased from 50% to 70% by 2002. By the way, it gained a 20% improvement over 1995. In comparison,
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 started with the lowest rating, under 30%, and continued on a downward trend, afterwards it hit a low of 10% in 1998.
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, the situation turned around remarkably in 1999, with a sevenfold increase in rating.
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C
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 steadily improved and finished the
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 at 80%, placing it as the top-rated
college
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words c, period, college with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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