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The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map
provide
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 information about the two proposed sites for
new
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 school in Canterbury.
Overall
, by having a cursory glance
on
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 the map , it can be clearly seen that the most significant
differences
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 between
two
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the two
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site
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sites
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 is the proximity to the
town
center
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 and university area.It is noticeable that S2 would be more accessible
comparing
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 with S1. To
begain
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begin
 with S1 ,which
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at
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 the northeast of
town
. It is outside the
town
 Centre.
Also
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 it is far away from
university
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 , but it
has been
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 near the housing area.
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 a large
town
 called Sturry can be reached
in
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about 5 km from S1 . It
contain
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 around 7000
of
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individuals. Moving to S2 which
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at
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south
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the south
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 direction . It has
significant
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a significant
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 location in
middle
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the middle
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 of
town
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the town
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center
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 and housing area , so it would be
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 for
student
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students
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 to reach
in
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 easily way . It has
small
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town
 that
contain
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 around 4.500
of
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people and can be reached in
short
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a short
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 time .
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • residential
  • accessibility
  • proximity
  • town centre
  • site
  • amenities
  • proposed development
  • population distribution
  • environmental impact
  • traffic congestion
  • community needs
  • educational facilities
  • public transport
  • recreational areas
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