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The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate how much money was spent by
students
 in the UK for various needs,
as well as
 the sources of their
income
.
Overall
, most
students
 have more than one source of
income
, student loan, family and part-time job being used by more than 50% of them. Rent was a category where the reference group spent more than half of their total monthly
income
. The Rent was the most expensive spender for
this
 social group with 385. In comparison to it, the young people didn't spend that much on travel, socialising and bills. These numbers are 52, 64,
69
Correct word choice
and 69
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 respectively.
Amount
Correct article usage
The amount
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 of money spent on food is double (about 124). Other
spendings
Fix the agreement mistake
spending
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were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 about 91.
Number
Correct article usage
The number
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 one source of
income
 was
Student
Correct article usage
a Student
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 loan with 80%. Family and part-time jobs placed 2nd and 3rd respectively with around 65%. Less than half of all
students
 used savings and bank
overdraft
Fix the agreement mistake
overdrafts
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. Grants and fundings
was
Change the verb form
were
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 used only by around 40% of
students
, which was the lowest number on the chart.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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