Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The way we interact with each other can influence the outcome fundamentally, and
that is
why
people
argue about whether we should compete or cooperate with each
others
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.
Nonetheless
, in a complicated modern
world
,
people
should learn
both
behaviour styles to survive
this
VUCA
world
.
Competition
and
cooperation
both
have benefits and setbacks. First of all, we can hardly accomplish something great
by
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on
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our own nowadays since things are more complicated
then
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than
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ever.
However
, the resources which everyone value,
such
as money and promotion
oppotunity
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opportunity
, is
scarse
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scarce
sparse
and limited. If we are forced to decide which one we should give the precious
resouce
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resource
, in most
condition
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conditions
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, the way to find out who is through
competition
.
That is
to say,
competition
and
cooperation
are
both
important to all of us. Despite learning how to
cooperation
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and
competiion
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compete
together may sound
contradicted
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, the reality is that we live in a
VUCA
world
which makes one way of doing things impossible. "
VUCA
" means
votality
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vitality
volatility
, uncertainty, complexity and ambiguity, and
this
term depicts the
world
we are living in perfectly. In
a
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environment
that is
always changing, we
also
need different ways to adjust the situation.
For example
, in the working context, we need to cooperate with our coworkers when we face customers for great experience; meanwhile, we will be competitors to our coworkers for a great opportunity to promote. In conclusion,
although
some think
people
should learn either
competition
or
cooperation
, in my view, we should learn
both
to survive
VUCA
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the VUCA
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environment. Only
learn
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one of each will make
people
lose precious opportunities or achieve limited results, so we need
both
and use different styles in suitable
situation
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situations
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to achieve more.
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Task Achievement
Your essay presents a balanced discussion of both viewpoints and offers a clear opinion. Try to incorporate more specific examples to illustrate your points, making your argument stronger and more persuasive.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay is logically structured and ideas are generally clear. There are minor inaccuracies in grammar and vocabulary that do not significantly affect comprehension, but could be polished for greater accuracy.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction sets the stage effectively, and the conclusion succinctly wraps up your viewpoint. This creates a coherent flow from start to end.
Task Achievement
You've effectively identified the significance of both competition and cooperation within a modern context, particularly with regards to a VUCA world. This demonstrates a clear understanding of the topic and its complexities.

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