Write a letter to the manager of the delivery company. In your letter: •Give details of the delivery •Describe what was damaged •Say what you would like the manager to do

Dear Sir, I am writing you to mention that recently I ordered the delivering to my home. I was supposed to get
the
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new vacuum cleaner with
modern
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a modern
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system of dust collection.
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I was supposed to get the big red sofa for two people. Later I
was getting
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got
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a call from
delivery
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the delivery
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man and heard from him that he
broke
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the family heirloom – the vase rare engravings, left by my great-great-grandfather.
Besides
I realized that the item exactly the vacuum cleaner was
also
a bit damaged. I was confused
with
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this
information
,
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because didn’t expect
such
unprofessionalism.
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this
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I immediately begin writing you the message. I am very angry and expect big compensation. You owe me a new vacuum cleaner and money for moral damages. I look forward
hearing
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to hearing
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from you the answer.
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sincerely Harry
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Provide more specific details about the delivery date and order number to enhance the context.
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Elaborate on what kind of compensation you are expecting to make your message clearer to the manager.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph carries a single main idea. You can separate the description of the damaged items from your expectations.
coherence cohesion
Develop a more logical structure by clearly separating the introduction, problem description, and expected action steps.
coherence cohesion
The letter has clear opening and closing salutations, which provide a professional tone.
task achievement
The letter addresses all parts of the task by mentioning the details of the delivery, describing the damage and the expected actions.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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