the graph gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social center in Melborne for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph highlights data about how many people participated in 5 various
activities
at one social club
in Melbourne, Australia for the first two decades of XXI
century.
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the XXI
Overall
, over the years more participants
got involved in activities
on Table tennis and Musical plays, while
Amateur dramatics lost its interest for
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. Being Add an article
the public
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, two types of Correct your spelling
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activities
, which are Film
club
and Martial arts levelled off. Another striking point is that over a twenty - year
period between 2000 and 2020, the Correct your spelling
twenty-year
Film
club
kept its position as the most popular activity.
Looking at the details of Table tennis, in 2000, there were about 15 participants
in club
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the club
a club
for
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. In the next 10 years, it attracted 5 more members, before Correct pronoun usage
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a dramatic
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. In 2005, the activity on
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participants
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the next
activities
, Film
club
and Martial arts, the
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, but without any changes in the Correct your spelling
functions
factions
overall
position. Film
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The film
club
started the process with about 60 members and finished it just below 70, while
the participants
of Martial arts kept their numbers at around 35.
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of amateurs on
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