the graph gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social center in Melborne for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The following graph shows us the numbers of
participants
for different activities
at one social centre in Melbourne
, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
There are five basic activities
such
as:
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