Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 2
The map illustrates two different proposed sites, S1 and s2, for the construction of a new shopping mall in the
city
of Brandfield
.
Looking at the overall
perspective, it can be seen that both
locations are near the city
centre
. Additionally
, there is a railway
and a road running through the city
casually.
To start with, S1, in the north of the city
, is located between the housing estate and the city
centre
. It is also
a place where surrounded by the river, roads and the railway
. What should be noticed is that in contrast
with S2, S1 is closer to the river which flows from the southwest to the north.
S2, situated in the south of Brandfield
, is the other option. It is in the middle of a road and railway
. Meanwhile, S2 is close to the industrial estate and the city
centre
. Both
S1 and S2 are far away from the golf course and park.
In summary, both
two sites are close to the city
centre
. At the same time, S1 is in the northern part of Brandfield
; however
, S2 is in the southern part of Brandfield
. In addition
, these two sites are both
near the road and the railway
, while
S1 is moreover
adjacent to the river.Submitted by n6160978224716 on
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