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The climograph below shows average monthly temperatures and rainfall in the city of Kolkata. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The climograph presents the average monthly
temperature
 and
precipitation
 in Kolkata. The units used are
millimeters
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millimetres
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 and degrees Celcius.
Overall
, both
precipitation
 and
temperature
 show a similar fluctuating trend from
January
 to December.
Additionally
,
temperature
 is high during May and low in the
month
 of
January
. In comparison, the
precipitation
 level in Kolkata is highest every July and lowest every December. In detail,
precipitation
 starts at around 20mm in
January
 and
remained
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remains
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 less than 50mm until April. It inclines to 100mm after a
month
 until it
jumped
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jumps
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 off to a little over 250mm in June. It continuously increases until it
reached
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reaches
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 a peak of under 350mm in the 7th
month
 of the year. From
then
, it declines slowly after two months at approximately 280mm. After a
month
, it goes down to 150mm and eventually
reach
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reaches
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 a low point of about 10mm.
Furthermore
, the average
temperature
 in the city of Kolkata starts at 200
°C
 in
January
. It moderately increases after 4 months reaching a peak of just above 300
°C
. The
temperature
 from May starts to go down until August and September at a similar
temperature
around
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of around
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 270
°C
. In October, it continuously
fall
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falls
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 at a low point of about 210
°C
.
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introduction conclusion
Provide a clear introduction and conclusion to give your essay a complete structure. This will help clarify the overall context before going into details.
clear comprehensive ideas
Avoid using ambiguous descriptions, such as 'jumped off' or 'inclines,' which may confuse readers. Use specific comparative language to describe changes in data.
relevant specific examples
While your essay effectively summarizes key features, it could benefit by comparing and contrasting more distinctively when relevant.
task achievement
You cover the main features of the data, effectively summarizing the trends in temperature and precipitation.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure makes it easy to follow the progressions of temperature and precipitation throughout the year.
supported main points
Your essay clearly highlights the highest and lowest points in temperature and precipitation, creating a clear picture of the overall trends.

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