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Band 4

Some people think that countries should produce food their population eats and import less food as much as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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the smaller part of citizens make a remark that the country's
food
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 supply should be produced by themselves,
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 reduce
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 as much as possible.
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 partly agree with
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 statement. Producing
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 locally has several undeniable benefits.
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, local
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 production can boost the country's economy. Farmers, agricultural workers, and others
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benefit from increased employment opportunities. By investing in local agriculture, a country can create jobs and reduce poverty, especially in rural areas.
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, reducing
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air pollution is another advantage. Transporting
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 across long distances pollutes the air.
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, consuming locally produced
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 can help in reducing environmental pollution.
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, it is not right to entirely eliminate
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 imports. Many countries, especially those with limited area land or specific climates, cannot produce all types of
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 efficiently.
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, tropical fruits like bananas might be difficult to grow in colder regions, making imports necessary to have diversity in diet. Relying on domestic production might restrict the variety of
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 available and impact people's nutrition and lifestyle. In conclusion,
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 there are clear advantages to producing
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 locally,
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 boosting the national economy and reducing environmental pollution,
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 imports can not be eliminated. Some countries simply do not have
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 resources or climate to grow a diverse range of fruits.
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, a balanced approach is essential.
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task achievement
Make sure to fully develop each main point with comprehensive examples. For instance, the argument about reducing environmental pollution could be strengthened by mentioning specific data or case studies.
general
Be mindful of language variations and consistency, such as capitalizing the first word in each sentence ('The'), to enhance readability and professionalism.
coherence cohesion
Include varied linking words and phrases to improve transition and flow between ideas. This can enhance the coherence and cohesion of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Well-structured essay with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, allowing readers to follow your argument easily.
coherence cohesion
The essay's main ideas are logically organized and clearly articulated, supporting the writer’s partial agreement stance effectively.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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