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The line graph compares the proportion of the population of 4 different countries in Asia living in cities between 1970 and 2020, with projection to 2040.

The line graph compares the proportion of the population of 4 different countries in Asia living in cities between 1970 and 2020, with projection to 2040.
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The line chart gives information about the proportion of
people
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 living in
cities
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 from 4 different countries in Asia, namely the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia, in
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, over a 51-year period from 1970 to 2020, with a prediction to 2040. It can clearly be seen that there was an increase in the urban of all four countries.
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 group of the total population is projected to continue climbing in the next 20 years. In 1970, Indonesia was the country that had the smallest
percentage
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 of the number of
people
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 living in
cities
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, at about 15%.
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, in 2020 Indonesia became the country with the
second largest
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percentage
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 of
people
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 residing in urban areas, at nearly 50%.
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, the Philippines took
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first place in 1970 with about 32% of total
people
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 living in
cities
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, but it dropped to third place in 2020, at 45%. Regarding, the urban population of the Philippines is predicted to continue to increase in the upcoming 20 years, at about 55% by 2040.
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, Malaysia is the country which has the most
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substantial climb in the
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 of
people
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 in
cities
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 compared to others; and
this
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 number is
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 projected to take the first place in 2040, at 80%. During the 51-year period since the 1970s
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although
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 the percentages of all the four countries
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 fluctuated, they still have an increase in general.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cities, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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