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The graph shows the impact of vaccinations on the incedence of whooping cough, a childhood illness, between 1940 and 1990 in Britain

The graph shows the impact of vaccinations on the incedence of whooping cough, a childhood illness, between 1940 and 1990 in Britain
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The graph
illustrate
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 the number of
cases
 of whooping
cough
, a childhood
illnes befor
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illness before
 and after vaccinations, from 1940 and 1990 in Britain.
According to
 the graph, reported
cases
 of whipping
cough
 rocketed up from 50
thousands
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 to above
of
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150
thousands
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thousand
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 in 1940 after
then
decresed
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decreased
 to 60
thousands
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thousand
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 and fluctuated between 60 and 90
thousands
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thousand
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 during a
small
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short
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 period. After fluctuation,
quantity
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the quantity
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 of whooping
cough
cases
 reached
the
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 peak with about 170
thousands
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occasions
,
then
 started hesitation
on
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 the same way. 
Beetwen
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Between
 1950 and 1960, when fluctuation was on the lowest point around 60 thousand reported
cases
, vaccination was begun. There was a significant decline
of
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 whooping
cough
occasions
closly
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close
 to 0 from 1960 to 1975.
Whereas
 30% of people were
vacctinated
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vaccinated
, the
illnes
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illness
has grown
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 to 60
thousands
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thousand
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 of
occasions
, after
vactination
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vaccination
uptaked
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uptake
uptakes
 and
achived
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achieved
 94 per cent the number of whooping
cases
 dropped to the end of the period and achieved 0
occasions
. In conclusion, there was a huge pandemic between 1940 and 1955.
However
, when
huminity
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humanity
humidity
 in
Brittain
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Britain
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 started to use vaccines the number of whooping
cough
 and childhood
illnes
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illnesses
 dramatically
deacresed
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decreased
decrease
.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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