The graph shows the impact of vaccinations on the incedence of whooping cough, a childhood illness, between 1940 and 1990 in Britain
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illustrate
the number of Change the verb form
illustrates
cases
of whooping cough
, a childhood illnes befor
and after vaccinations, from 1940 and 1990 in Britain.
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illness before
According to
the graph, reported cases
of whipping cough
rocketed up from 50 thousands
to above Change to singular
thousand
of
150 Change preposition
apply
thousands
in 1940 after Change to singular
thousand
then
decresed
to 60 Correct your spelling
decreased
thousands
and fluctuated between 60 and 90 Change to singular
thousand
thousands
during a Change to singular
thousand
small
period. After fluctuation, Correct word choice
short
quantity
of whooping Add an article
the quantity
a quantity
cough
cases
reached the
peak with about 170 Correct article usage
a
thousands
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thousand
occasions
, then
started hesitation on
the same way.
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in
Beetwen
1950 and 1960, when fluctuation was on the lowest point around 60 thousand reported Correct your spelling
Between
cases
, vaccination was begun. There was a significant decline of
whooping Change preposition
in
cough
occasions
closly
to 0 from 1960 to 1975. Correct your spelling
close
Whereas
30% of people were vacctinated
, the Correct your spelling
vaccinated
illnes
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illness
has grown
to 60 Wrong verb form
grew
thousands
of Fix the agreement mistake
thousand
occasions
, after vactination
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vaccination
uptaked
and Correct your spelling
uptake
uptakes
achived
94 per cent the number of whooping Correct your spelling
achieved
cases
dropped to the end of the period and achieved 0 occasions
.
In conclusion, there was a huge pandemic between 1940 and 1955. However
, when huminity
in Correct your spelling
humanity
humidity
Brittain
started to use vaccines the number of whooping Correct your spelling
Britain
cough
and childhood illnes
dramatically Correct your spelling
illnesses
deacresed
.Correct your spelling
decreased
decrease
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