The charts below show the changes in owernship of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparsions where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The two graphs
reveals
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that
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the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and how
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time they spent
in
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homework in households in a specific nation from 1920 to 2019
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, electrical appliances in
washing
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the washing
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machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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experienced
significant
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increase between 1920 and 2019,
while
people
spent
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who spent
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time
in
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housework had gradually
decline
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during the given years. residents use electronic
in
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
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dramistically
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dramatically
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from about 5% to 100% from 1920 to 2019.
Similarily
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, the rate of vacuum people using electricity
signficantly
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significantly
increased from 30% to 100%. the proportion of washing
mechine
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machine
in
electrionic
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electronic
fluctrated
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fluctuated
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from 40% to around 65% between 1920 to 1980. After that, the figure experienced
stable
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increase to about 78%. In
constract
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contrast
, people
spent
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spending
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time in
household
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households
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constantly dropped from 50 hours per week to 10 hours per week between 1920 and 2019.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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