The charts below show the changes in owernship of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparsions where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The two graphs
reveals
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reveal
that
the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and how Correct word choice
apply
many
time they spent Correct quantifier usage
much
in
homework in households in a specific nation from 1920 to 2019
Change preposition
on
Overall
, electrical appliances in washing
Add an article
the washing
a washing
machine
,Fix the agreement mistake
machines
refrigerator
and vacuum Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
cleaner
experienced Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
significant
increase between 1920 and 2019, Add an article
a significant
while
people spent
time Correct pronoun usage
who spent
in
housework had gradually Change preposition
on
decline
during the given years.
residents use electronic Change the verb form
declined
in
Change preposition
apply
refrigerator
Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
dramistically
Correct your spelling
dramatically
drastically
climb
from about 5% to 100% from 1920 to 2019. Wrong verb form
climbed
Similarily
, the rate of vacuum people using electricity Correct your spelling
Similarly
signficantly
increased from 30% to 100%. the proportion of washing Correct your spelling
significantly
mechine
in Correct your spelling
machine
electrionic
Correct your spelling
electronic
fluctrated
from 40% to around 65% between 1920 to 1980. After that, the figure experienced Correct your spelling
fluctuated
fluctuate
stable
increase to about 78%.
In Add an article
a stable
constract
, people Correct your spelling
contrast
spent
time in Wrong verb form
spending
household
constantly dropped from 50 hours per week to 10 hours per week between 1920 and 2019.Fix the agreement mistake
households
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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