The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The graphic describes the number of hours spent by
diferent turists
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different tourists
doing activities
while
on holiday in Greece in
summer
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the summer
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of 2019.
Firstly
, the graphic shows a marked peak of
Brazilians
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tourist
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tourists
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at
beach
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the beach
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, followed by Turkish and
Americans
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tourist
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tourists
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that
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who
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prefered
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prefer
to spend time at
beach
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the beach
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. It
ilustrates
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illustrates
a dip
of
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in
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Chinese people
that
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who
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spent doing activities at
beach
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the beach
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.
Secondly
, Chinese
tourits
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tourists
are by far the most people that
spent
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more hours reading books in Greece, followed by Americans. Turkish and Brazilians had the same number of hours spent reading a book.
Adicionally
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, Americans and Turkish
tourist
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tourists
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are the
marjority
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majority
of people that
prefered
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prefer
to spend time visiting places, followed by Brazilians and the
Chineses
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Chinese
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. The chart illustrates
diferent
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different
tourist
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tourists
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and
diferent
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different
activities that they
prefered
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preferred
to do in Greece in August 2028.
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