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The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied graphs depict the consistency of
fish
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pie
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 and its production.
Overall
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, the
pie
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 consists of 4 different products and the process of manufacturing
it
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is
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 divided into 2 steps. The product, namely
fish
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pie
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 arranged in a microwaveable package, and the structure of
this
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 dish comprises various things. The first thing is a potato
that is
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 located on the surface of food. The rest products are
under
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apply
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the
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apply
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potato
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potatoes
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,
fish
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 and peas.
Finally
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, the
pie
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 is filled with sauce. The process of making those pies started with the potato, which needed to be cleaned and peeled,
then
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, the slices of them boiled and went to the wrapping zone. The second step is about delivery which takes 12 hours.
Subsequently
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, the salmon was pickled with lemon juice and salt and went to the oven to be cooked.
Following
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this
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, employees removed the bones and skin of the
fish
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 and will be inspected by the controller.
At the end
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, salmon, peas and tomatoes with potatoes were wrapped in some containers.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, pie with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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