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Band 5.5

Many people think that land in the city should be used for residence while others think that we should use land for parks and community places. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The factor which measures the development of a country is the arrangement of the cities of that country. Some
people
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 believe that the
city
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 should be used for only residential areas,
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 other argues that it will be a
place
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 for both
parks
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 and the
community
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both perceptions and in my opinion, I think the
city
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 will be a
place
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 for residence
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 it has a
space
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 for
parks
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 and a
place
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 for social discussion. Proponents believe that the
city
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 will be a
place
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 for residence where
people
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 will maintain a healthy lifestyle by cutting down on various types of
pollution
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. Again, the
city
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 centre sometimes not be so spacious and
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people
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 live a life which is congested where there is a narrow
space
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 between two buildings.
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, the density of the population is increasing day by day and for
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 burgeon,
people
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 need more places to build new buildings.
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, different types of
pollution
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 as air
pollution
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, and noise
pollution
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 are accelerated in an obvious range.
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, Dhaka is an overpopulated
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 in Bangladesh here population are out of capacity , and if it creates a
place
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 for
parks
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 and social
community
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 centres it would be totally detrimental to
people
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 who already live here.So, sometimes it will be thought that the
city
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 will serve as only residential areas. Opponents believe that a
city
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 which has been requires a specific
place
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 where
people
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 will go to some relaxation and take a deep breath with greenery and the local
community
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 will
be gathered
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 to share their ideas and information which have
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positive impact on social development.
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,
city
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 life is a boring life so if there is a free
space
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 children will go there for their regular play and it will be helped for different age groups
people
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 by doing their regular physical exercise which plays a crucial role in case of diminishing obesity. To cite an example, Some
city
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 corporations take action in
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 regard so that there will be a park
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that
people
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 visit there for relaxation
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 to minimize health issues
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 as obesity , and diabetes.
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 a
city
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 would be an ideal
place
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 for habitat if there is a
place
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 for residence buildings,
space
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 for
parks
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 and a
community
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 where
people
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 will gather in their free time to retain future communication.

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task achievement
In the introduction, clearly state your opinion along with the balanced representation of both views.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to maintain cohesion.
coherence cohesion
Strengthen connections between main points and examples in paragraphs for better clarity.
task achievement
The essay provides a balanced discussion of both perspectives on land use.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are succinct, framing the essay well.
task achievement
Specific examples are used effectively to illustrate points, notably the example of Dhaka.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • residential buildings
  • housing shortage
  • green spaces
  • urban populations
  • living costs
  • recreational space
  • quality of life
  • economic benefits
  • public health
  • well-being
  • mixed-use developments
  • reduce healthcare costs
  • environmental impact
  • improving air quality
  • sustainable city planning
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