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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011
#percentage #households #accomodation #england #wales
The chart illustrates how
people
 in the UK especially in England and Wales
having
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have had
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 a type of
households
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household
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 for the past 93 years since 1918. The number of
the
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apply
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people
are
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is
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 counted in
percentage
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percentages
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 per
decade
. There are two types of how
british
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British
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people
 own
an
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apply
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accomodation
Correct your spelling
accommodation
 in their hometown,
which owned
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own
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 the
accommodation
 or
rented
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rent
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 the
accommodation
.
And it
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It
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 shows that throughout the years
people
live
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who live
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 in England and Wales
more
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are more
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 likely to build or
bought
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buy
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house
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a house
the house
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 for
the
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a
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 living rather than rent from someone else. In the first
decade
, individuals used to like
for
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apply
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renting a place to live, but for the next
six
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six-decade
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decade
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decade,
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 there was a sharp decrease of persons that charter an
accommodation
,
while
 the number of households owning an
accommodation
 rapidly rocketed and
reach
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reached
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 a peak in 2001. But there is a
slightly
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slight
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 change
happened
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that happened
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 in 2011 where they both
having
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had
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 a slight downward and upward for each, there must be something
happened
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that happened
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 between 2001 and 2011 that
make
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made
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 some of them change their mind
for
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about
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 having
a
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apply
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owned
accommodation
 to
rented
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rent
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 from others.
However
, it can be concluded that
people
 who live in England and Wales in
this
decade
 prefer to build their own place to live.
Submitted by Agreita Salsabila on

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, decade, accommodation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • households
  • owned accommodation
  • rented accommodation
  • England
  • Wales
  • chart
  • between
  • trends
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuate
  • rise
  • fall
  • peak
  • significant
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • steady
  • dramatic
  • overall
  • range from
  • at the beginning of
  • at the end of
  • over the period
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