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The table below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The table below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The given table provides data about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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, as can be seen, bananas were sold in the UK more than in other countries in 2004
whereas
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 coffee was sold in Switzerland more than in others in 2004. Looking more closely at the banana's table,
it is clear that
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, Switzerland experienced significant growth from 3 to 6
million
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euros
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. After that, the third furthest difference took place in 2004 in Belgium with 0.7
million
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euros
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.
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, there was a minimal rise from 1.8 and 0.8
million
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euros
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 in 1998 to 2 and 1
million
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euros
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 in 2004 in Sweden and Denmark respectively. On the other side, a look at the coffee table reveals that the United Kingdom with a 4.5
million
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euros
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 increase had the second most variation in 2004. The sales in Belgium followed by a gentle rise from 0.6
million
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euros
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 in 1998 to 4
million
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euros
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 in 2004.
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, Sweden increased by 0.2
million
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euros
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 and reached 1
million
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euros
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 in 2004
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 Denmark had a dramatic drop from 2
million
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euros
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 in 1998 to 0.8
million
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euros
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 in 2004.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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