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Online, people write product reviews and opinions about services. Is it a good thing or bad thing?

#people #product #reviews #services
The
are
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 continuous debate
whether
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about whether
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 online review will benefit
in
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decision making
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. Some believe that online
review
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reviews
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 provide valuable
information
 for
the
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apply
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customers
.
While
 others criticized the subjective opinions may be misleading.
This
 essay will illustrate the pros and cons of online review. Supporters argue that online
reviews
 offer crucial feedback that can help minimize impulse purchases.
For instance
, platforms like Yelp and Google
Reviews
 allow users to share detailed accounts of their experiences, which can guide potential buyers in making informed decisions.
However
, critics caution that many
reviews
 can be biased, as some businesses may post fake
reviews
 to mislead
customers
.
Thus
,
while
 online
reviews
 can be valuable tools, users must remain vigilant and discerning. Supporters argue that online
reviews
 provide feedback for potential buyers, which can minimize impulse (impulse) shopping. Famous platforms
such
 as Yelp and
google
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reviews
 are highly recommended by many
people
. Previous
customers
 share the quality of the product, the dining experience
as well as
 the service, which are all valuable
information
 for
people
 from both local
people
 and
travelers
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travellers
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 from all across the world. They can choose the goods based on other
people
's experience and avoid with less quality.
Moreover
, the comments on the internet can in return serve as feedback for the shop and retail
saler
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sales
 to improve their product and service better. On the flip side, opponents believe that the
information
 on the internet could be biased or misleading. Some shop owners spread fake
reviews
 and comments that may lead the buyer towards
a
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 wrong direction. They use
this
 way to battle against their competitors and lure
customers
 (
custumers
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customers
) in.
Furthermore
, different
people
 may have different opinions on various things. The
reviews
 could be totally subjective and individualized (individualized).
To sum up
, online
reviews
 are
undeniable
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 valuable for guiding
people
 to make choices.
However
, it comes with challenges
such
 as biased
information
 and different opinions. Striking the balance between specific personal experience and objective facts will lead to a better choice.
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coherence cohesion
Work on diversifying your language to avoid repetition of similar phrases. For instance, 'Supporters argue' appears twice at the beginning of paragraphs.
task achievement
Try to avoid small inaccuracies in spelling such as 'custumers' and 'individualized'.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to improve readability further.
task achievement
The essay provides a complete response by discussing both the positives and negatives of online reviews.
coherence cohesion
There is a clear introductory and concluding statement that presents the essay's overall argument.
task achievement
You included relevant examples, such as the mention of Yelp and Google Reviews, to support your points.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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