Nowadays, anyone can post information on the internet even if it is incorrect. As a result, most of the information we read is inaccurate. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fallacious data spread on the web by anonymous sources has been rising causing the Internet to become unreliable.
This
has led many to be sceptical regarding a large chunk of the hyperspace and its authenticity. If questioned, I personally agree with
this
notion to a major extent. My view is justified
further
. Out of several arguments, the foremost one to support my opinion is that the Internet is unrestricted.
In other words
, in today's
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world, going online and posting
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content has become very convenient and free;
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netizens do it frequently and without any type of monitoring and censoring.
As a result
, more and more people are exposed to unfiltered and dubious
information
, which they believe easily. In fact, one survey revealed that more than 70%
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on the Net are not based on truth. Apart from that,
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social media gives users broadcasting ability. To reformulate, unlike earlier, anonymous individuals can gain
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number of followers on their social media and possess an ability to influence them with their posts. In the past, mass communication was not possible or was limited to certain qualified individuals,
whereas
today any person irrespective of their age, gender, social status, qualifications, or moral understanding can reach
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thousands or millions sometimes.
This
causes rumours, fake news, and wrong
information
to spread faster than ever.
However
, I could not overlook the opposite side, too. Mainly,
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transparency has increased
due to
the internet.
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is to say that anyone can refer to any
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without any restrictions and only trust the official sources for reliable
information
.
Moreover
, the multimedia increases the veracity of the news now more than ever. Earlier, only text-based news was published, but now video evidences are attached which makes it more certain.
To conclude
,
although
all
information
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cyberspace because more trusted sources could be referred
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I maintain to a large extent that, primarily,
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social media and lack of moral code,
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the web
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unreliable place to gain
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everybody must check
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of everything they consume off the web.
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