IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from, and the charts show how it was distributed. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from, and the charts show how it was distributed. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and the charts show how it was distributed.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
he
Correct your spelling
The
show examples
 table and pie charts provide data on the budget obtained by police and how
this
Linking Words
money
Use synonyms
 was distributed in a single location in Great Britain in the
years
Use synonyms
 2017 and 2018.
Overall
Linking Words
, what stands out from the table and charts is that in both
years
Use synonyms
 the highest amount of
money
Use synonyms
 (in millions of euros) was received from the national government and the lowest was received from grants like other sources.
However
Linking Words
, most percentages of
this
Linking Words
 received
money
Use synonyms
 was spent on giving salaries to the office staff, and a small fraction used in technology.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, in 2017 total
money
Use synonyms
 received was 304.7 million which slightly rose to 318.6 million in 2018. In both
years
Use synonyms
 majority of the
money
Use synonyms
 came from the national government earned from sources like grants was 38m in 2017 and rose only 0.5m in the final year.
Whereas
Linking Words
 the majority of the
money
Use synonyms
 was spent on giving salary, in 2017, three-quarters
money
Use synonyms
 was spent on wages which declined by 6% in the next year.
While
Linking Words
, in 2017, only 8% was spent on technology which rose to almost double (14%) in the following year. The proportion of budget spent on building and transport remained the same which was 17% in both
years
Use synonyms
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words money, years with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: