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Band 4

What are the causes of water shortages? Please also offer some solutions to this problem. Give some reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
Water
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 is a major source in the
world
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. It is four in
three part
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three-part
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 wanter in
nthe
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the
world
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 but
reasontly
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recently
 we have to face
water
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 shortage.
In
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This
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this
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 problem have to
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be sholve
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sholve
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solve
shelve
shove
 in
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the futur
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futur
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future
. I will explain
about
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apply
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this
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 problem and
solutions
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are
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in are
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 next paragraph.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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, about the paragraph global have three
pats
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parts
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 of
water
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 but it has mostly
unuses
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unused
water
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for example
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 we can not
use
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sea
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seawater
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water
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, north and south
barnces
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branches
 ice
water
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. the scientist said we have well
water
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 3
percent
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per cent
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in
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of
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 the
world
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 but
in
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apply
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this
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percent
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per cent
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 has
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used
water
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 0.003%
percent
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per cent
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 of
wanter
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water
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. they are comparing if we have 1000
liter
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litre
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water
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 in
this
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percentag
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percentage
 will be one spoon
wanter
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water
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 so we can know how much
water
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 we are using in the
worod
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world
.
Body paragraph 2
In addition
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, people have to know about how to
use
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this
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water
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 in the
world
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 and our
lifestyls
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lifestyles
lifestyle
reson
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reason
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in
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apply
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this
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water
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 our
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futur
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future
 generation do not know about the
dringing
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drinking
water
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. we have to follow
sustinable
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sustainable
develepment
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development
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this
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 natural
water
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.
therfore
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Therefore
,
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the govertnment
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govertnment
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government
 and
invironmental socities
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environmental societies
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ti
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to
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introduction
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introduce
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nto
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to
 people
how
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to how
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 to
use
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sustinablly
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sustainably
sustainable
in
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apply
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this
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water
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.
Moreover
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,
recycle
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recycling
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 and
reuse
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reusing
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 is must
iportant
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important
 to us because we can manage
this
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water
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 for
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the futur
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futur
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future
.
for example
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; we can
incude
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include
 sustainable
water
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usege
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usage
sylubus
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syllabus
 school
curriculam
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curricula
 it will
be
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be used
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use
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 for
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futur
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future
generation
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generations
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.
Conclusion
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In conclution
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conclution
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conclusion
, we have to know
water
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 wastage and
solutions
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. when we manage
this
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water
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use
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,
recycle
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recycling
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,
reuse
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reusing
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,
saving
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and saving
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 are
most
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the most
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 important
solutions
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 for
water
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 shortage
solutions
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. sustainable is
must
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most
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 important for us.

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coherence cohesion
Work on structuring your essay with clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single idea. This will improve the logical sequence of your writing.
task achievement
Incorporate more specific and relevant examples to support your points, which will strengthen your task achievement score.
grammar
Focus on using accurate grammar and spelling. Reading through your essay and editing after writing might help identify and correct errors.
coherence cohesion
Develop a stronger conclusion by summarizing all the discussed points and stating their implications; this reinforces the main message.
task achievement
The essay discusses both the causes and solutions of water shortages, which is essential for task achievement.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, providing a basic structure to the essay.
task achievement
The idea of sustainable development and environmental awareness is effectively integrated as a solution to the problem.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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