The pie charts below show the sale of washing machines in Dyton Company in one decade. The bar graph is based on a survey conducted to measure the popularity of the products in this company between 1990 and 2000.

The pie charts below show the sale of washing machines in Dyton Company in one decade. The bar graph is based on a survey conducted to measure the popularity of the products in this company between 1990 and 2000.
The pie charts illustrate the
market
share
of four washing machine companies in a
10 year
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period (from 1990 to 2000),
while
the graph shows the result of a survey that monitors the popularity of Dyton products over the same period.
Firstly
, it is obvious that in 1990 MMC had more than half of the
market
share
(60% in total), which decreased significantly over
the
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time and in 2000, it accounted for only 39% of the
market
share
.
On the other hand
, Obecalp's
market
share
was more steady and varied between 19 and 17 per cent over the period.
Moreover
, Corr
also
had almost the same results of 20% and 21% in the first 5 years, but from 1995 to 2000 it dropped dramatically to 12%.
However
, Dyton only had 2% of the total
market
share
and in 1995 it earned 8 per cent of it.
This
was the lowest
share
in
that
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5 years, but in 2000 there was a surprisingly high increase in
Dyton
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market
share
and
this
time the company had the
second biggest
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share
in the
market
.
To sum up
, the popularity of
this
company rose as its
market
share
went up. As expected, in 2000 the company had the biggest rise in popularity.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words market, share with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • sales figures
  • consumer preferences
  • economic conditions
  • technological advancements
  • market competition
  • marketing strategy
  • increase/decrease
  • popularity
  • survey results
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