The pie charts below show the sale of washing machines in Dyton Company in one decade. The bar graph is based on a survey conducted to measure the popularity of the products in this company between 1990 and 2000.

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The pie charts illustrate the

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of four washing machine companies in a

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period (from 1990 to 2000),

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the graph shows the result of a survey that monitors the popularity of Dyton products over the same period.

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, it is obvious that in 1990 MMC had more than half of the

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(60% in total), which decreased significantly over

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time and in 2000, it accounted for only 39% of the

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, Obecalp's

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was more steady and varied between 19 and 17 per cent over the period.

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had almost the same results of 20% and 21% in the first 5 years, but from 1995 to 2000 it dropped dramatically to 12%.

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, Dyton only had 2% of the total

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and in 1995 it earned 8 per cent of it.

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was the lowest

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5 years, but in 2000 there was a surprisingly high increase in

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market

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and

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time the company had the

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in the

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To sum up

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, the popularity of

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company rose as its

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went up. As expected, in 2000 the company had the biggest rise in popularity.

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consumer preferences
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Many people work long hour, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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