The chart below gives attendance figures for Grandville Stadium from 2017, which are projected through 2030 after a major improvement project. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives attendance figures for Grandville Stadium from 2017, which are projected through 2030 after a major improvement project. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The
given
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bar chart gives data about how many
people
attended
to
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Grandville
stadium
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Stadium
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in 2017 and 2020 and makes
estimation
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an estimation
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regarding how many
people
will come to
stadium
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the stadium
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for different proposes after some improvements
done
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are done
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.
Overall
,
people
used
stadium
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stadiums
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for sporting
events
mostly in both years 2017 and 2020. It seems sporting activities will be
first
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the first
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reason for
go
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going
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to the
stadium
a decade later.
People
less
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are less
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likely to
watching
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watch
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the theater
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theater
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theatre
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in
stadium
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the stadium
a stadium
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and it is estimated that it won’t be as popular as other
activites
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activities
in 2030 too. When we look at the theatre charts, it is obvious that theatre wasn’t a common activity among
citizien
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citizen
citizens
and it seems like some improvements may
will
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increase
number
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the number
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of
attendance
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attendees
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.
However
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However,
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it will not reach
sport
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sports
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events
and
concerts
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concert
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levels. Concert activities
on the other hand
, it was more popular in 2020 than
as
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apply
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it was in 2017. When developments are done, it will make huge differences
on
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in
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concert
attendences
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attendances
attendance
. In
long term
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projection it it will reach over 100.000 attendance in 2030. Joining
sportintg
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sporting
events
in Grandville
stadium
was
common
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a common
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leisure activity among Grandville
citizien
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citizen
citizens
. Approximately 150.000
people
went
the
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to the
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stadium
for sporting
events
in 2017 and 2020.
However
, these numbers won’t change after ten years. It is estimated that
number
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a number
the number
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of attendance will
rose
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rise
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slightly in 2030.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, stadium, events with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attendance figures
  • projected
  • improvement project
  • major enhancement
  • trend
  • time span
  • analyze
  • decrease
  • stagnation
  • growth
  • critical increase
  • forecast
  • overview
  • comparison
  • anticipated
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