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Some people think that a person can never understand a culture of the country unless they speak the language. Do you agree with this opinion?

#people #person #culture #country #language
Most
people
 agree that
language
play
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plays
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 a pivotal role in
culture
,
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apply
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 because
language
 is the key
for
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to
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 communication.
Albeit
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 some
people
 think it is essential to speak the
language
 in order to understand a
culture
, I disagree with
this
 statement because
that is
 not the only
way
 to understand a
culture
.
Language
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 definitely important in
culture
, because
people
 share their knowledge and information through communication that will be understood by each other. Many cultural idioms, expressions and traditions
that
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apply
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are hard to translate from
local
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the local
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language
 to
other
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another language
other languages
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language
. Literature, music and
movie
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movies
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also
 play significant
role
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roles
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 in understanding
culture
, but
language
barrier
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barriers
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 may limit
this
 experience.
However
,
language
 is not the only factor that
contribute
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contributes
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in
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to
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culture
's comprehension. It is not always necessary to speak the
language
 to understand its
culture
.
For instance
, someone can learn a lot about
korean
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Korean
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culture
 through music and movies,
altough
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although
korean
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Korean
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use
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uses
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 its own
language
 in the
lyric
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lyrics
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 and movie's dialogue. Another example is
people
 can enhance their knowledge about Thailand
culture
 through their traditional food
such
 as Tomyam, Pat Yai, Mango sticky Rice, etc without
have
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having
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 to speak
Thai
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the Thai
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language
. I believe it is the other
way
 around, Art and Food
is
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are
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 two of many universal
way
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ways
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 to
expressing
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express
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culture
, and
this
 can pique
someone
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someone's
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 interest in learning the
culture
 deeply and
try
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trying
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 to understand
local
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the local
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language
. In conclusion,
language
 is an important tool to enhance cultural understanding, but it is not an absolute requirement. There are many
way
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ways
show examples
 to appreciate and learn new
culture
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cultures
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 which do not require
to
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one to
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 speak
local
Add an article
the local
show examples
language
.
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grammar
Ensure that subject-verb agreements are accurate, such as changing "language play" to "language plays."
connectives
Use connectives correctly to improve the flow of ideas, such as replacing "altough" with "although."
clarity
Clarify certain points to avoid ambiguity, such as explaining how art and food are universal expressions beyond language.
examples
The writer presents a clear viewpoint and supports it with relevant examples, such as references to Korean culture through music and movies.
structure
The essay has a cohesive structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion that enhance readability.
task accomplishment
The use of examples like traditional Thai food effectively demonstrates understanding and appreciation of culture beyond language.

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