More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves,without looking at the place . Why do you think this is happening? Is it a positive or negative trend

In recent years ,it has been noticed that a significant number of individuals who go to popular
tourist
attractions go there to snap
pictures
of themselves,
instead
of looking at the place. I believe
this
is because most
places
are no longer focusing on their cultural significance and human values have
also
changed.
However
, I think
this
is a negative trend and
this
essay will explore my reasons.
To begin
with,
people
nowadays visit
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places
to take photographs of themselves without going around for sightseeing because most of these
places
such
as museums, galleries or exhibition
centers
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are no longer paying attention to acquiring important historical collections or guides who could help
tourist
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learn about these collections or past events. Most galleries now spend their money on the beautification of their
centers
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instead
of acquiring or protecting collections, and
this
makes it a good location to take selfies. Most of the tour guides are not very knowledgeable about history or most historical items making it difficult for them to answer questions from tourists,
therefore
people
no longer see the need to enter these
places
.
For example
, research has shown that many
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spend
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of their time in art galleries taking
pictures
with friends or family rather than going around to appreciate the beautiful paintings or sculptures.
Furthermore
,
people
now value creating memories and social media
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and they go online to look for
places
that have beautiful sceneries mainly because of
pictures
and not
due to
the fact that they are ready to explore these
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.
However
, In my
opinion
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this
is a negative trend owing to the fact that it leads to loss of cultural heritage and significance. A vast number of individuals are no longer interested in learning about culture or the history of their environment making them
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lose their sense of identity.
Additionally
, foreign tourists who come around are not able to learn and appreciate other
people
's culture because their attention too
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been diverted to snapping photos
thus
inhibiting cultural transmission among them .
For instance
, a survey carried out among
tourist
visiting an international
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showed that the majority of them spend time taking shots rather than listening to their tour guides . In conclusion, an increasing number of
people
these days visit common museums or exhibition houses to take
pictures
with others because the priorities of those in charge of these
places
have shifted towards only the beautification of these
centers
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and
people
now
also
prefer to come there to create memories
instead
of learning. I believe that
this
trend is negative because it would lead to the loss of cultural significance,
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of identity and later extinction if actions are not taken to curb
this
phenomenon.
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