The diagram below shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The diagram below shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.   Write at least 150 words.   (20 mins.)
The diagram illustrates the
water
cycle
, the constant movement of
water
on, above and below the surface of the Earth.
Overall
, the 5-step
cycle
begins with the
evaporation
of
water
in the
ocean
and
end
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ends
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with the runoff of surface
water
.
This
is achieved by the return of
water
into the
ocean
and
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the continue
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continue
Wrong verb form
continued
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evaporation
of
water
into the air
according to
the
cycle
. The process starts with the
evaporation
of
ocean
water
into the air, which
provide
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provides
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about 80% of
total
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the total
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water
vapour in
air
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the air
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. After the
evaporation
, the
cycle
then
continues with the condensation that
change
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changes
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the
water
vapour to the liquid
water
. When they have condensed
water
vapour to liquid
water
, the
cycle
can continue the process with the formation of the cloud. At the step of precipitation, the cloud will
then
release
the
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apply
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liquid in the form of rain and snow, which can
be
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either
flows
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flow
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into the lake or
flows
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flow
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overland, which is called runoff. The process of runoff can be considered as the
last
step of
water
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the water
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cycle
,
water
that
flows
on the ground will seep down and become groundwater that will
flows
Change the verb form
flow
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into the
ocean
and continue the
water
cycle
.
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