The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table below presents data on the number of
people
in New Zealand Use synonyms
according to
their Linking Words
age
from 2011 to 2012. In New Use synonyms
Zealand
most of the population are of Add a comma
Zealand,
Use synonyms
age
Correct article usage
the age
group
15-39, Use synonyms
while
the Linking Words
age
Use synonyms
group
Use synonyms
While
there was an increase in the total number of populations, the number of Linking Words
people
under 39 decreased and the most significant increase was the Use synonyms
people
above 65.
In 2011 there Use synonyms
was
nearly 1.58 million Change the verb form
were
new
Zealanders in the 15-39nage Capitalize word
New
group
, closely followed by Use synonyms
40
-64 Correct article usage
the 40
age
Use synonyms
group
, Use synonyms
both
together was almost a total of 3 million.
nearly 900,000 were under 15 and Correct word choice
and
Linking Words
finally
the fewest Add a comma
finally,
was
over the Correct subject-verb agreement
were
age
of 65m about 600,000.
By 2012, the population increased by 0.6% , Seniors older than 65 experienced the most increase of 4% to nearly 600,000 Use synonyms
people
. The Use synonyms
age
Use synonyms
group
40-64 comes in second place with a rise of 0.6%, Use synonyms
while
the remaining demographics reported the same percentage decrease of 0.2%Linking Words
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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