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The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #country #birth #people #australia #countries #summarise #features #comparisons
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illustrates
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illustrate
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datas
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data
 concerning the generation nation of Australian citizens
along with
wheather
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whether
 they
born
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were born
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 in
ehither
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either
 urban areas or rural areas.
Overall
,
A
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at A
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glance at two these graphs, it
apears
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appears
 that among of five countries include
UK
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the UK
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, Australia, China, New Zealand and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and the other
country
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countries
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, The other
country
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countries
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 have
most
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the highest
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 proportion of residency
of
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in
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 Australia after their native.
Also
, These
pepole
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people
 mostly
lives
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live
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 in the Cities
compare
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compared
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 with
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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.
First,
according to
 the pie chart, the
nation
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national
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of
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apply
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fertility of individuals living in Australia
belong
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belongs
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 to Native. Accounting for just less than three
quarter
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quarters
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, second in terms of birth of society is other
country
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countries
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 with 14% and
then
 third most widely is the
Uk
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UK
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 with 7%, as
follow
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followed
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 by China, New Zealand and Netherlands with 6% collectively.
Second,
with regard to the table that provided information
of
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on
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 how many of them live in cities and
suburb
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suburbs
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, Significantly, the majority of individuals who live
at
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in
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 urban from China
with
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99% in comparison
of
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to
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 the native
who
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apply
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just 83% of them
resident
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residents
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at
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town
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the town
a town
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. Other nations include
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, The Uk,
New
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and New
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 Zealand listed with 90%, 89%,
80
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and 80
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% respectively, which residency in the cities.
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