The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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of
visitors
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per month to three different London Museums (
British
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Museum
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, Science
Museum
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, and Natural History
Museum
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) from June to September 2013.
Overall
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, three museums experienced a fluctuation,
while
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the
British
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Museum
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reached the highest
number
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of
visitors
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throughout the period. In June, the
number
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of
British
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Museum
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visitors
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was approximately 600,000 people, slightly higher than the Science
Museum
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's 100,000. The
British
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Museum
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's
number
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then
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rose significantly over a month, reaching nearly 800,000 in July, which gradually decreased in the following month to around 500,000 people.
In contrast
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, the Science
Museum
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's attendance fell steadily from June to August,
then
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slightly increased to around 450,000 people in September.
In addition
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, the
number
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of
visitors
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to the Natural History
Museum
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marked a decline from the beginning to the middle of the period to about 400,000 attendees,
while
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it started to grow to approximately 420,00
visitors
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at the end
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of the period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, british, museum with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • illustrates
  • number of visitors
  • museums
  • from June to September 2013
  • the British Museum
  • the Natural History Museum
  • the Science Museum
  • overall trend
  • attracted
  • the most visitors
  • fewest visitors
  • peak
  • experienced fluctuations
  • decline
  • highlight
  • dominance
  • consistent decline
  • minor resurgence
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