The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The line graph illustrates the
number
of
visitors
per month to three different London Museums (
British
Museum
, Science
Museum
, and Natural History
Museum
) from June to September 2013.
Overall
, three museums experienced a fluctuation,
while
the
British
Museum
reached the highest
number
of
visitors
throughout the period. In June, the
number
of
British
Museum
visitors
was approximately 600,000 people, slightly higher than the Science
Museum
's 100,000. The
British
Museum
's
number
then
rose significantly over a month, reaching nearly 800,000 in July, which gradually decreased in the following month to around 500,000 people.
In contrast
, the Science
Museum
's attendance fell steadily from June to August,
then
slightly increased to around 450,000 people in September.
In addition
, the
number
of
visitors
to the Natural History
Museum
marked a decline from the beginning to the middle of the period to about 400,000 attendees,
while
it started to grow to approximately 420,00
visitors
at the end
of the period.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • illustrates
  • number of visitors
  • museums
  • from June to September 2013
  • the British Museum
  • the Natural History Museum
  • the Science Museum
  • overall trend
  • attracted
  • the most visitors
  • fewest visitors
  • peak
  • experienced fluctuations
  • decline
  • highlight
  • dominance
  • consistent decline
  • minor resurgence
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