Some people believe that a gap year between school and university is a good idea, while others disagree strongly. Consider both sides of this debate and present your own opinion. You should give reasons for your answer and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.
Currently, public places in many
cities
of different countries
has
much more Change the verb form
have
noise
pollution
. While
,
Remove the comma
apply
effect
Correct article usage
the effect
to
Change preposition
on
environment
of Correct article usage
the environment
this
trouble is biggest
, there are several reasons for protecting it.
On the one hand, many Correct article usage
the biggest
cities
of countries
is
becoming Change the verb form
are
pollution
by Replace the word
polluted
noise
, air, and so on. But common of this
is noise
pollution
. This
create
Change the verb form
creates
of
Change preposition
apply
people
. For example
, in cities
becoming
population cause Verb problem
rising
to
Change preposition
apply
noise
. Also
, coming tourists
from other countries
, increasing migrants and another
reasons lead to Replace the adjective
other
noise
pollution
in countries
. Not only, it
happen Add a missing verb
does it
by
Change preposition
to
people
, but also
cause
Correct subject-verb agreement
causes
transports
to it. Fix the agreement mistake
transport
Such
as,
public places Remove the comma
apply
of
many Change preposition
in
cities
have many cars. Thus
, the sound of them create
Change the verb form
creates
those
Correct determiner usage
apply
pollution
.
On the other hand
, this
trouble might solve
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be solved
by
several different ways. Change preposition
in
For instance
, some people
have got to migrating
to other sides. BecauseWrong verb form
migrate
,
older don'Remove the comma
apply
t
like noise
, even some don't
adore funny of
children. Migrating is better for them. Change preposition
apply
Government
and Correct article usage
The government
people
don'Correct article usage
the people
t
ignore this
trouble. They'll try to solve this
, such
as, they can limit tourists
that come to countries
or they might send tourist
Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
different
Change preposition
to different
cities
in a country. Currently, a city of a country come
to about 200 Correct subject-verb agreement
comes
tourists
in a day. They definitely lead to noise
pollution
. If government
limit to coming many Correct article usage
the government
tourists
to a country in a day, tourists
have got to visit to
Remove the preposition
apply
another
Replace the adjective
another cutie
other cuties
cuties
of a state. Correct your spelling
cities
Also
, sound
of cars is harmful and many Add an article
the sound
people
don't
like it. If people
drive cars in
a Change preposition
at
limit
speed, it's better for many.
In conclusion, in Replace the word
limited
countries
while
things that lead to Correct word choice
apply
noise
pollution
is
a lot. They might prevent Correct subject-verb agreement
are
Correct pronoun usage
it by
by
any Change preposition
in
ways
.Fix the agreement mistake
way
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coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your essay more logically; ensure each paragraph clearly covers one aspect of the argument.
task achievement
Try to make your ideas clearer and more comprehensive by developing each point further. Use specific examples to illustrate your arguments better.
task achievement
You have effectively included both sides of the issue in the essay, which shows your ability to address the task.
coherence cohesion
An introduction and conclusion are present, setting the essay structure effectively.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?