Some people believe that a gap year between school and university is a good idea, while others disagree strongly. Consider both sides of this debate and present your own opinion. You should give reasons for your answer and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

Currently, public places in many
cities
of different
countries
has
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much more
noise
pollution
.
While
,
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effect
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to
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on
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environment
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the environment
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of
this
trouble is
biggest
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, there are several reasons for protecting it. On the one hand, many
cities
of
countries
is
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are
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becoming
pollution
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polluted
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by
noise
, air, and so on. But common of
this
is
noise
pollution
.
This
create
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creates
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of
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people
.
For example
, in
cities
becoming
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population cause
to
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noise
.
Also
, coming
tourists
from other
countries
, increasing migrants and
another
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other
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reasons lead to
noise
pollution
in
countries
. Not only,
it
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does it
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happen
by
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to
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people
, but
also
cause
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causes
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transports
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transport
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to it.
Such
as
,
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public places
of
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in
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many
cities
have many cars.
Thus
, the sound of them
create
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creates
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those
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pollution
.
On the other hand
,
this
trouble might
solve
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be solved
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by
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several different ways.
For instance
, some
people
have got to
migrating
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to other sides. Because
,
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older don'
t
like
noise
, even some don'
t
adore funny
of
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children. Migrating is better for them.
Government
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and
people
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the people
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don'
t
ignore
this
trouble. They'll try to solve
this
,
such
as, they can limit
tourists
that come to
countries
or they might send
tourist
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tourists
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different
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to different
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cities
in a country. Currently, a city of a country
come
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to about 200
tourists
in a day. They definitely lead to
noise
pollution
. If
government
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the government
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limit to coming many
tourists
to a country in a day,
tourists
have got to visit
to
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another
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cuties
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cities
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of a state.
Also
,
sound
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of cars is harmful and many
people
don'
t
like it. If
people
drive cars
in
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at
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a
limit
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speed, it's better for many. In conclusion, in
countries
while
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things that lead to
noise
pollution
is
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are
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a lot. They might prevent
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it by
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by
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in
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any
ways
Fix the agreement mistake
way
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.
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coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your essay more logically; ensure each paragraph clearly covers one aspect of the argument.
task achievement
Try to make your ideas clearer and more comprehensive by developing each point further. Use specific examples to illustrate your arguments better.
task achievement
You have effectively included both sides of the issue in the essay, which shows your ability to address the task.
coherence cohesion
An introduction and conclusion are present, setting the essay structure effectively.

Your opinion

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