What are not satisfied with the changing rooms in a sports center that you visit. Write a letter to the sports center manager. In your letter: -Explain the problem. -Say how you feel about this problem. -Say what steps you would like the manager to take.

#rooms #sports #center #visit #manager #-explain #-say #steps

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Dear Manager, I am one of the regular

user

Change to a plural noun

users

show examples

of the

sport

Change the noun form

sports

show examples

centre and I am writing to you in

context

Correct article usage

the context

show examples

problem

Correct article usage

the problem

show examples

everyone facing because of changing rooms.

Actually

Add a comma

Actually,

show examples

changeroom seems quite congested and less spacious these days as more people are

joing

Correct your spelling

joining

the recreation hall. Plus, the locks of two of

the

Remove the article

apply

show examples

these

door

Fix the agreement mistake

doors

show examples

are not functioning properly.

Few

Change the article

A few

show examples

days back, someone had difficulty locking doors and struggled for like 1 hour. Having said that, I ponder,

Linking Words

this

Correct word choice

that this

show examples

problem can actually make people not just frustrated but can

also

Linking Words

lead people to opt out of recreational activities. Because they can not get

full

Add an article

the full

show examples

benefit of changing rooms as these are not safe and private anymore.

Linking Words

Moreover

Add a comma

Moreover,

show examples

safety and privacy gets at stake.

However

Linking Words

, I feel like renovating cloakrooms into

Add an article

a more

show examples

open and more safe

place

Fix the agreement mistake

places

show examples

with better locking

system

Fix the agreement mistake

systems

show examples

will

mot

Correct your spelling

not

show examples

only

Change the verb form

apply

show examples

help to get more customers and users but would help to keep present customers more happy and

satisfied

Correct quantifier usage

more satisfied

show examples

Lastly

Linking Words

, I hope

feedback

Correct article usage

the feedback

show examples

given should be considered and taken well care of. Regards Simran

Submitted by preetsimran0123 on Sun Nov 03 2024

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence and cohesion

Consider dividing your paragraphs more clearly, each focusing on a single idea, to enhance readability and coherence.

coherence and cohesion

Ensure each paragraph consistently flows from one point to the next, maintaining a logical progression throughout the letter.

task achievement

The letter effectively addresses the problem, expressing concern and suggesting practical solutions.

task achievement

The tone of the letter is appropriately polite and formal, suitable for communicating with a manager.

5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

178 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

<4
band
Some people think that it is more effective for student to study in groups, while other believe that it is better for them to study alone. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Contained in the bar chart is data pertaining to the number of foreign visitors in 3 resorts representing 3 cities of Vietnam between 2000 and 2006.
4
band
There are some students who care about nothing but studying,and doing unpaid community service may bring them an opportunity to get to know what the real world around them looks like. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
I agree unpaid community service can help students borden their horizen to the outside world.
7.5
band
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave?
The quote that people's behaviour may be affected by their styles is considered to be correct; however, I am inclined to believe that, although the way people choose their outfits must not affect their behaviour, it is an automatic response to the appearance of people and their clothing and is an unpreventable reaction.
7
band
Some people feel that boarding schools are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.
It is often argued that schools where students live at the school during educational terms are a perfect choice for youngsters, whereas others believe otherwise. Even though boarding schools appear to benefit children by teaching them life skills, day schools seem to allow them to have more freedom.
5
band
Although family is a powerful influence on child's life, it is also influenced from outside the home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some individuals believe that family have a great impact on the children's well being ,but they also think that the outer environment also encourage their life in diggerent way . I agree with the given statement to a great extent because they spend their most of their time with their parents in their earlier age ,but schools and teachers also play a great role in their life in late age . I will these points in details in the upcoming paragraphes along with the conclusion.

What are not satisfied with the changing rooms in a sports center that you visit. Write a letter to the sports center manager. In your letter: -Explain the problem. -Say how you feel about this problem. -Say what steps you would like the manager to take.

Some people think that it is more effective for student to study in groups, while other believe that it is better for them to study alone. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There are some students who care about nothing but studying,and doing unpaid community service may bring them an opportunity to get to know what the real world around them looks like. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave?

Some people feel that boarding schools are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

Although family is a powerful influence on child's life, it is also influenced from outside the home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?