It is suggested that curfew hours must be implemented among children. And they are only allowed to go out at night with the supervision of adult. Do you agree or disagree?
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children
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supervised
adult
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adults
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safety
children
.
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hours
may deprive the children
's privacy and increse
the Correct your spelling
increase
adult
's workload. It is obviously
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obvious
children
go
outside with their friends are Correct pronoun usage
who go
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building
relationship
. It is critical for them Fix the agreement mistake
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realize
the concept of privacy. If there are watcher Fix the infinitive
to realize
near by
them, it may disrupt and deprive their conversation and private zone. Correct your spelling
nearby
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, curfew
hours
may leading
to Change the verb form
lead
be leading
rise
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a rise
the
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in the
wokeload
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workload
parent
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parents
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parents
they
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apply
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fatigued
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if their
children
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apply
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children
, which not only deprive
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deprives
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them
chill
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also
will induce
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induces
the argue
and conflict between them.
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arguments
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, I still believe hat
implementing Correct your spelling
that
curfew
hours
for children
are
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is
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compulsory
it
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apply
protection
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protecting
children
's safe
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safety
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show
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shows
children
go
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who go
then
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than
at
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in
morning
. Correct article usage
the morning
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, children
may easily get loss
and disappear at night, since there are fewer people on the street and it Replace the word
lost
hard
to stop the crime and find Add a missing verb
is hard
the
aid for Correct article usage
apply
children
. Moreover
, children
have less self-protection than adult
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adults
for
example
most of child have weak Add a comma
example,
awerenance
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awareness
to
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of
stranger
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strangers
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, they do not have enough physical shape to against crimer
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crime
crimes
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, it is essental
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essential
for
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to
pubulish
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publish
curfew
hours
for
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to
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avoid
tragically
event happen.
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tragic
although
curfew
hours
may gain
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cause
heavy
workload Correct article usage
a heavy
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on
adult
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adults
for
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of
children
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of Correct your spelling
safety
children
more
important than other things, so I agree with those Add a missing verb
is more
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suggestions
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