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The graph below shows the percentage of self employed workers of the total workforce in five countries in 1998 and 2008. summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisonss where releavnt.

The graph below shows the percentage of self employed workers of the total workforce in five countries in 1998 and 2008. summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisonss where releavnt.
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The bar graph illustrates the percentage of self-employed workers in the total workforce encompassing the
Russian
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Republic
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, Slovakia, Czech
Republic
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, Greece and
Turkey
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 in the years 1998 and 2008.
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,
Turkey
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 surpassed other countries in self-employment
whereas
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Russian
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Republic
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 accounted for the least throughout the given period. Significantly, self-employed workers declined by the end of the year in Greece and
Turkey
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.
In contrast
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, other countries showed a gradual rise towards the end of the decade.
According to
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 the graph, more than 50% of workers were in
Turkey
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 in 1998 , before falling to less than 40% in 2008.
Moreover
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,Greece had slightly over 40%
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 in 1998 and declined to approximately 35% in 2008.
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, the businesses of the
Russian
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Republic
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, Czech
Republic
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 and Slovakia exhibited an increase in a decade.
Furthermore
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,a 2% rise in
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Russian
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Republic
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,a 4% climb in the Czech
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 and a 3% upward trend in Slovakia were noticed in a 10-year span

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Vocabulary: Replace the words russian, republic, turkey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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