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The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the location of
dance
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classes
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,
while
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 the accompanying bar chart compares the contribution of two age groups in three types of
dance
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classes
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.
Overall
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, the majority of
dance
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classes
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 are held in private studios, with
children
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 under the age of 11 being more interested in ballet
classes
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.
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, modern dancing is the most sought-after dancing class among teenagers. Looking at the location of
dance
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classes
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 in more detail, almost half of them are held in private studios, followed by after-school
dance
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classes
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 in school halls making up one-fourth of the total locations. Meanwhile, only 18% of the
classes
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 are held in community halls, and college-based studios
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 only 10%. Regarding different types of
classes
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, it is obvious that the younger group find ballet to be more interesting, with 600 participants. The figure for
this
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 type of class is halved in the
teenager
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 group.
In contrast
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,
while
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 over 500
children
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, aged11-16 participate in modern
dance
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classes
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, only 300
children
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 aged under 11 opt for these
classes
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.
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, relatively the same number of
children
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 from both groups are registered in tap dancing
classes
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, with over 400 participants in each group

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, classes, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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