The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the location of
dance
classes
, while
the accompanying bar chart compares the contribution of two age groups in three types of dance
classes
.
Overall
, the majority of dance
classes
are held in private studios, with children
under the age of 11 being more interested in ballet classes
. In contrast
, modern dancing is the most sought-after dancing class among teenagers.
Looking at the location of dance
classes
in more detail, almost half of them are held in private studios, followed by after-school dance
classes
in school halls making up one-fourth of the total locations. Meanwhile, only 18% of the classes
are held in community halls, and college-based studios comprises
only 10%.
Regarding different types of Change the verb form
comprise
classes
, it is obvious that the younger group find ballet to be more interesting, with 600 participants. The figure for this
type of class is halved in the teenager
group. Replace the word
teenage
In contrast
, while
over 500 children
, aged11-16 participate in modern dance
classes
, only 300 children
aged under 11 opt for these classes
. However
, relatively the same number of children
from both groups are registered in tap dancing classes
, with over 400 participants in each groupSubmitted by ghazalmoosavi79 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, classes, children with synonyms.
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