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The bar chart compares the total number of vehicles per one thousand people in China who owns a car in the years 1987 to 1999.

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The bar chart compares the total number of vehicles per one thousand people in China who owns a car in the years 1987 to 1999.
The
illustrates
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 give some information about how much total of the cars used in China for 12 years from 1987 to 1999. If we look
from
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 the trends, we
saw
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 that there was a significant increasing of people
that
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who
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 bought a vehicle in China. Especially
in
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from
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 1993 to 1995 which
show
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 a sharp
rocketed
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 up of the number.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • comparative data
  • vehicle ownership
  • per 1000 people
  • economic growth
  • rising income
  • year-on-year increase
  • significant jumps
  • data points
  • urbanization
  • industrialization
  • infrastructural impact
  • environmental impact
  • plateau
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